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Played Character Jocelyn Von Duerr

This character is actively played.
Dekuras

Dekuras

Technologic Witch Doctor
Joined
Jul 20, 2014
Messages
238
Reaction score
324
Points
483
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Character Information
  • Full Name: Dr .Jocelyn Jamison von Duerr
    • Nickname: Doctor
  • Race: Calderligan Ailor
    • Affinity: Artisan-Warden Archon
  • Age: 30
  • Gender: She/They
  • Eye Color: Purple
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Core Concept
  • Jocelyn believes that Dragons are truly the creators of life, though follows the faith in a scholastic manner of trying to understand their "Arts" to the point of a science.
  • Jocelyn von Duerr is a wealthy surgeon and medical producer at the top of his field.
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Proficiencies (14/14)
Intelligence - 7
Tech Exchange (Free from Ailor)
Protocol Scout
Protocol Rewind
Protocol Photon
Protocol Gateway
Protocol Analysis
Protocol Debate
Protocol Eject
Protocol Coding(Free from Ley Point Buy)
Protocol Detect(Free Ley Point Buy)
Magic - 0
Wisdom - 7
Medical Buff
Medical Revive
Medical Bolster
Medical Purging
Medical Sweep
Medical Resist
Medical Rescue

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Appearance Information
  • Jocelyn von Duerr is a short person 5'1 stature with long black hair. He often wears conservative clothing, opting for dark green medical robes a majority of the time.
Life Story
  • Jocelyn was supposedly born a twin on February 14th to a Calderligan doctor and an Ithanian woman. At a young age, his father pressured him to uphold the family tradition of becoming a doctor.
  • He was speculated to have gone to the Regalian Ecological Academy, throwing himself into his studies with great fervor.
  • After graduation, Jocelyn supposedly served purely as a medic in the Regalian Military. Here he built upon the skills that he had learned during his time in medical school, and became comfortable with his new profession.
  • Within recent years, Jocelyn has become engrossed in creation theory and Dragon worship.
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I'll be taking care of this application.

@Dekuras I have two points to bring up:
  • The application is pretty well rounded and would be insta-accepted if not for the following point:
  • I find explanations on his medical/alchemy skills lacking. Maybe he did not study the School of Medicine (or Alchemy) etc, but for a character who has an intellect focus as opposed to a military or charisma based focus, there should be some sort of explanation as to how far his medical skill stretches. I would either suggest finding a way to put some official Medical training in there, or to find some way to derive a comparison to the skill level in comparison to characters that have studied in those fields of knowledge. If he did not officially study at all and is practically an amateur, then how does that reflect on his personality etc.
Be sure to tag me when you make changes and mark it in a blue color or something like that so it's easier for me to find.
 
Updates have been made.
  • Medical and alchemical sources explained, alchemical being ic events.
  • Tenpenny removed as a whole in favor of school of biology
  • Aged up for school of Biology
  • Life story rewritten entirely.
@MonMarty
 
@MonMarty Tagging for re-review given the changes in lore at to advance the character to expert.
Notable changes are:
Aging up to 32 as opposed to 30.
Changing weapon of choice to simply not have one.
Removal of Alchemy skills aside from application.
Adding of the Stalwart Mentality tallent.
Hopefully corrections to the new lore.
 
Sounds fine I don't think I need to do a re-review.
 
@Bagley_
Added Unionst prospect
Edited both Culture Points, and Proficiency points as a result
 
Re-reviewed.

Approved, points add up and the Aspect seems well integrated. I would agree with adding some more general detail on it though.
 
A well written application! I wasn't sure if the re-review was needed only for the points added or if a rewrite was done, so I've thoroughly looked over the whole thing anyways.

Re-approved.

@Dekuras
 
@TheVigilantWolf I'm not sure if this requires re-review but shifted his father to being Calderligan and as a result shifted his language from Alt-Regalian to the Calderliga Dialect.
 
Edited to be in line with two updates.
  • Personality section updated to new core format.
  • Aged up a year to be in line with Virtuoso requirements.
  • Reworked Proficiency Points
 
@BillyTheScruffy Tagging for re-review
Changed to Norean Ailor
Aged up and Proficiency points edited as a result
All specific dates removed from backstory
 
Claimed for review!

App looks great, but you currently have 15 points of 14 points spent. It's notable that the Empire Linguist pack from Ailor doesn't contribute to your CHA at all, so it should still be 0. Go ahead and shuffle that around and tag me again so I can get this approved ASAP. Thank you!
 
Yurs said:
Claimed for review!

App looks great, but you currently have 15 points of 14 points spent. It's notable that the Empire Linguist pack from Ailor doesn't contribute to your CHA at all, so it should still be 0. Go ahead and shuffle that around and tag me again so I can get this approved ASAP. Thank you!
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Reshuffled, Obstructive alchemy axed.
 

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